dawn flushes
across the pale cheeks
of this winter sky
we wonder
if you will make it
through another night
Editor's Choice
Commentary by the editor, an'ya:
A very visually descriptive sedoka by Debbie Strange that utilizes nature in the first tercet and deepens to a human emotion in the second tercet. Her juxtaposition is outstanding, as we see the pale cheeks of that winter sky in the person who may not make it through another night. Debbie also has so easily managed a perfect 3/5/5 rhythm in both verses.
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