My thanks to the judge, an'ya, for her lovely commentaries!
tussocks
soften the bog's edge
my thoughts
lost in this tangle
of lemming runways
3rd Place
2023 Fleeting Words Tanka Competition
Judging Commentary:
In Third Place, this interesting tanka by a consistent winner in various contests, Debbie Strange who lives in Canada. The word "tussocks" in line 1 immediately grabs the reader's attention. The person in this tanka knows enough to stay at the edge of the bog, and is aware enough to see the "lemming runways" (excellent word choice btw).
skeins of wool
unravel at my feet
in the last light
a swirl of snow geese
begins to descend
Honourable Mention
2023 Fleeting Words Tanka Competition
Judging Commentary:
Again, to Debbie, thank you for entering this HM. An incredibly visual write that allowed me to imagine a woman in her rocking chair with skeins of wool at her feet. I sense the metaphor here and can see the woman dozing off with that swirl of descending snow geese.
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