Friday, December 23, 2016

United Haiku and Tanka Society, Fleeting Words Tanka Competition, 2016

mute swans
under a moon bridge
the things
I should have confessed
make no difference now

1st Place


Judge an'ya's comments:

Selected for the first place in this competition, is this tanka by a well known author from Canada, Debbie Strange. Smoothly composed, the words "mute swans" in line 1 and "under a moon bridge" in line 2 starts it off beautifully. Debbie creates a distinct pause before she goes into lines 3 and 4 which juxtapose with a human relationship. This tanka then finally spills over to line 5, in a flowing crescendo and the moment of closure. Simple images, and straightforward words make this tanka work for anyone and everyone who reads it.

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